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Your skin would be lace
Between my fingertips,
Tangling with streams
Of golden sunlight that
Button you up,
Leaving intricate patterns
That tell your secrets
With every thread.

You'd breathe like a mermaid,
The scent of the sea echoing
In our veins,
Like teenage hearts
Pumped full of lust.
Too fast.
Like heels on marble floors,
But you're so
Much closer
Than that.

You're blood in my lungs
And air in my heart,
But I live only
Off the raindrops
That fall from
Your soft, sea-stone eyes
When a smile curves your lips.

The edges
Gathering me,
Unraveling me.

(I carve you in the sand,
But ocean tears
Wash you away.)
Being with you would be like the sound of the ocean.
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Lovely~
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WhisperedInsanity Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you, sunshine<3
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by =DailyLitDeviations in a news article that can be found here: [link]

Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by :+fav:ing the News Article. Keep writing and keep creating.
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WhisperedInsanity Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013  Student Writer
You don't know how much that means to me! Thank you <3 I've checked out the other artists already, they're so amazing, it's an honour to be mentioned with such brilliant writers.
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forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Your fantastic work has been featured here!
I'd really appreciate it if you could give some love to the other features and :+fav: the journal! :)
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WhisperedInsanity Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013  Student Writer
OH OH wow, thank you so much! I will most definitely will! Thank youuu!
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2012  Student Writer
The imagery is beautiful, and the emotion comes through wonderfully!
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WhisperedInsanity Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you so much! x3
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2012  Student Writer
Very welcome! =D
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River-989 Featured By Owner May 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is beautiful :)
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WhisperedInsanity Featured By Owner May 27, 2012  Student Writer
Awe, thanks =)
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River-989 Featured By Owner May 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
welcome
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autumnlit Featured By Owner May 21, 2012
It's so lovely, and the the last lines really get me, "I carve you in the sand, But ocean tears Wash you away." !!!!
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WhisperedInsanity Featured By Owner May 27, 2012  Student Writer
Awe, thanks x3 I'm glad you like it!
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autumnlit Featured By Owner May 28, 2012
You're welcome! ^^
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featherback Featured By Owner May 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wow! Amazing! The imagery in this is incredible, your word choice so powerful. I loved the ' You're blood in my lungs / and air in my heart' line in particular. You definitely have a talent with description! Beautiful. <3 C:
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WhisperedInsanity Featured By Owner May 21, 2012  Student Writer
xD Awe, thank you so much! <3
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InTheStarryNightSky Featured By Owner May 20, 2012
A lovely piece. Wonderful job.
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WhisperedInsanity Featured By Owner May 21, 2012  Student Writer
Oh, thank you!<3
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InTheStarryNightSky Featured By Owner May 21, 2012
You're welcome. :aww:
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CelestialMemories Featured By Owner May 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is absolutely beautiful, sweetheart. It brings so much loving emotion from me! It's fantastic! You did an excellent job! :star: :star: :star:
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WhisperedInsanity Featured By Owner May 21, 2012  Student Writer
I'm glad you think so! Thank you =D
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CelestialMemories Featured By Owner May 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome!
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Concora Featured By Owner May 20, 2012   Writer
This is lovely! The juxtaposed imagery of the
ocean and the subjects is very well done, making
for a very pleasurable read. C:
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WhisperedInsanity Featured By Owner May 21, 2012  Student Writer
xD Thank you so much!!
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KondouMayu Featured By Owner May 20, 2012
Such a beautiful poem! And I agree with the comment above! The emotion and imagery is so amazing! You truly are my poetic hero. :D
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WhisperedInsanity Featured By Owner May 21, 2012  Student Writer
That means a lot x3 Thank youuu!
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KondouMayu Featured By Owner May 22, 2012
You're welcome!
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Life-Is-Oppurtunity Featured By Owner May 20, 2012  Student Writer
I love the imagery and emotion you've created, this is amazing!
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WhisperedInsanity Featured By Owner May 20, 2012  Student Writer
thank you so much x3 I'm so happy you think so <3
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