I want to start off by saying that I really appreciate the notion behind this, that you mentioned in your description. You managed to address a very troubling issue head on and with a first-person perspective that brings readers to the heart of the problem. For that, I rated your Deviations' vision with 5 stars.
Originality was rated similarly high because of your style and unique descriptions, such as "Dishevelled hair forms a fuzzy halo...an angel who's risen from the fiery depths below." (This beautiful writing style also gave you points for technique!) I love the detail of the disturbing laughter as well, which really adds to the originality as well a bringing attention to the character's precarious mental state. The phrase "Depression is flaunted across the media daily as if it was a new, must have accessory" also really gets to me. Overall, your haunting descriptions of a real disease, and pointing out the flaws in society's construction of depression as such, make this piece very gripping and original.
I rated this piece at 4 stars for technique, because although I loved many of your poetic descriptions and overall style, I felt there was some room left for grammatical improvement. Some small errors I noticed were "dishevelled" (should be disheveled) and "forgot touch", which should perhaps be "forgotten touch". Since these small mistakes don't really take away from the overall impact of the piece, they didn't lower your rating for technique dramatically. You also have some sentences that seem a bit too long, making them awkward, an example of which is, "I wonder how my skin...hiding in my brain." This sentence is important, as it develops the reader's understanding of the character, and her negative feelings about herself. However, the lack of punctuation and the sentence length make it hard to grasp the concept. Perhaps shortening this and similar sentences, as well as adding punctuation, would give your writing better readability. Most of your writing in this piece, though, has a great variety of sentence lengths, and I wanted to point out that this definitely adds to the impact, especially the short last sentence, "I just want silence." The variation between longer poetic phrases and shorter fragments is an excellent part of this piece.
Your great success in turning a troubling societal problem into a lovable yet disturbingly beautiful character gives this piece huge impact and amazing originality. Keep writing!<3